Where have all the editors gone....

[dcseain]

I have edted the Opening Words i requseted editing help with. Strikthrough text has been deeted, and italicized text has been added. Updated doc is here in this post. Thank you all for your input to date.

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[nancylebov.livejournal.com]

I wasn't sure if you wanted more editing, but I saw a couple of possibilities that I've added to he main post.

[dcseain.livejournal.com]

Thank you. That's exactly what i was hoping for.