古崇賢的学报

...but i've posted a start to another installment of the Wheel of the Year series of poems, which i've been working on erratically for some while now. Comments, as always, are welcome. Now is, for me, the counterpoint to Samhain in the Fall - these between times fit me best, for though i enjoy the strength of the Summer Sun and the strength of the Winter Stars, it is between and betwixt where i am most truly at home.

Here be a major revision, whence i think shall come the next-to last iteration.

Comments and feedback welcome from all, though i'm at a point where dr_tectonic's and mergyeugnau's input would be most welcome, if they each be feeling up for it.

I posted a new draft of Summer's End, over in seain_scribbles.

I'm in a mood today. I've gotten less than ideal amounts of sleep the last several days, and i'm very cranky. My apologies if i've taken that out on any of you over the last couple of days. I will see to it that i go to bed early enough tonight to get the sleep i need. I shudder to think what this mood would be like were i not generally cheery and optimistic.

The first two drafts of this poem are linked here, in this post. I want to incorporate some aspects of chaosdancer's comments on Draft 0, though i may save her input as the core for the Yule poem. Oh, i've decided to do a cycle of 8 for the major Wiccan Shabbats, plus probably 2, one for New Moon, and one for Full Moon, and probably Harvest Moon, and Blood Moon, and i'm forgetting a moon to round out the cycle to 13. Thirteens have been very good to me in this life, it's my favourite number. All the jobs that have gone best for me i either interviewed, or started work, on the 13th.

Anyway, back to the poem. I've lopped off the ending from Draft 1, unless others of you think it should stay, though who knows, it may reappear. The n-dashes will become m-dashes, and i'm debating counting a fulls stop mid-line as a syllable. I'll try reading it aloud again before committing to that. I've tightened it up rhythmically a lot this draft.

I think i'll end up keeping the random-length stanzas, as these will be mini-epic in format, i think; ooooh, maybe a single epic in 13 parts... . I standardized the first line of the stanzas this draft, too; thank you nancylebov for that suggestion. As Summer Ends is the working title, though it may end up just being Samhain, or if choosing the epic format, The Wheel of the Year.

Part of me might rather do a cycle to the Native American cycle, as that's my tradition, though i think it need be a separate project. Anyhow, ( off to draft 2 the poem )

And feedback, as always, is most welcome.