HELP! How do i end this

[dcseain]

I started this, but have no clue how to conclude it. HELP! I don't care if you know what Samhain is, i just need input. THANKS!

EDIT: I think i'm going to keep working on this one beyond the Samhain Service, and polish into what i know it can be. So, input on it as a zero-draft poem are most welcome.


EDIT the Second: Some suggestons from mergyeugnau, delivered via IM, have been incorporated, hence the strikthroughs.


Gaia Circle welcomes you to Samhain 2006.

As Summer ends, days shorten,
as the Darkness that is Night,
little by little,
comes to rule our World.

As Summer ends, we see
the trees change:
some are green,
some are yellow,
some brilliantare orange,
a few a fiery red,
others are already bare.

As Summer ends,
the bare trees
set their buds in
preparation for Spring,
when some trees again
will be bare
and some trees again
will be green, while others
will burst forth in colour
ephemeral, for our eyes to enjoy.

As Summer ends, the days are
still pleasantly warm,
but the nights have an
uncomfortable, foreboding
chill about them.

As Summer ends, those empty
trees let us see that Orion now
rises in the East
and Scorpius now
sets in the West,
forever chasing one another
through the dark heavens,
struggling in the epic battle of
Life and Death.

As Summer ends, we find
ourselves in this wondrous,
sacred, and holy time,
between the warm and
the cold, between
the light and the
impending dark

As Summer ends, we embrace
the Dark, and realize that the
dearly departed, the wee folk,
and others walk among us for
a few days as we all exist together,
here,
between the worlds.

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Thank you for reviewing it so quickly, also. :">