ext_3072 ([identity profile] nancylebov.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] dcseain 2005-10-24 09:35 pm (UTC)

I like the order you've got, except that I'd put 7 at the beginning as well as at the end.

It may need another paragraph between 6 and 1 to make the transition between the literal/liminal beach and the sea of tears.

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