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Starkly beautiful -
flat -
a rare tree,
branches pointing east,
fleeing the westerly winds.
Amazing big sky overhead,
like being on the sea -
not water, but flowing grass.



Links to the formative process, including some thinking aloud in the comments in the several posts, are here. Thank you to all who gave feedback as this evolved.
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Is here, with nascent Draft 3 in the comments.

Poetry

Oct. 18th, 2007 05:34 am
dcseain: Cast shot of me playing my violin in role of minstrel in the Two Gentlemen of Verona (Default)
A zero draft of Sunflowers is here in near-to-finished form for your perusal and commentary. Thanks!

I should mention that this was written happenstance in today's chat log at Babble.
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Here be a major revision, whence i think shall come the next-to last iteration.

Comments and feedback welcome from all, though i'm at a point where [livejournal.com profile] dr_tectonic's and [livejournal.com profile] mergyeugnau's input would be most welcome, if they each be feeling up for it.
dcseain: Cast shot of me playing my violin in role of minstrel in the Two Gentlemen of Verona (Default)
Please tell me about your concepts/beliefs/understanding of/about Middle Earth.

I have 2.5 understandings of this and 2 derives from 1; the .5 is related to 1. That is all i have to say on that topic for now.
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I posted a new draft of Summer's End, over in [livejournal.com profile] seain_scribbles.

I'm in a mood today. I've gotten less than ideal amounts of sleep the last several days, and i'm very cranky. My apologies if i've taken that out on any of you over the last couple of days. I will see to it that i go to bed early enough tonight to get the sleep i need. I shudder to think what this mood would be like were i not generally cheery and optimistic.
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I've posted over in [livejournal.com profile] seain_scribbles, as i get underway with the poem cycle again.
dcseain: Cast shot of me playing my violin in role of minstrel in the Two Gentlemen of Verona (Default)
The first two drafts of this poem are linked here, in this post. I want to incorporate some aspects of [livejournal.com profile] chaosdancer's comments on Draft 0, though i may save her input as the core for the Yule poem. Oh, i've decided to do a cycle of 8 for the major Wiccan Shabbats, plus probably 2, one for New Moon, and one for Full Moon, and probably Harvest Moon, and Blood Moon, and i'm forgetting a moon to round out the cycle to 13. Thirteens have been very good to me in this life, it's my favourite number. All the jobs that have gone best for me i either interviewed, or started work, on the 13th.

Anyway, back to the poem. I've lopped off the ending from Draft 1, unless others of you think it should stay, though who knows, it may reappear. The n-dashes will become m-dashes, and i'm debating counting a fulls stop mid-line as a syllable. I'll try reading it aloud again before committing to that. I've tightened it up rhythmically a lot this draft.

I think i'll end up keeping the random-length stanzas, as these will be mini-epic in format, i think; ooooh, maybe a single epic in 13 parts... . I standardized the first line of the stanzas this draft, too; thank you [livejournal.com profile] nancylebov for that suggestion. As Summer Ends is the working title, though it may end up just being Samhain, or if choosing the epic format, The Wheel of the Year.

Part of me might rather do a cycle to the Native American cycle, as that's my tradition, though i think it need be a separate project. Anyhow, off to draft 2 the poem )

And feedback, as always, is most welcome.
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With special thanks to [livejournal.com profile] dr_tectonic, here is draft 1 of the poem, with general intro, likely to be rewritten a bt, for tomorrow's service. Poem will evolve much from this point, but here's what tere is for now: )
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I started this, but have no clue how to conclude it. HELP! I don't care if you know what Samhain is, i just need input. THANKS!

EDIT: I think i'm going to keep working on this one beyond the Samhain Service, and polish into what i know it can be. So, input on it as a zero-draft poem are most welcome.


EDIT the Second: Some suggestons from [livejournal.com profile] mergyeugnau, delivered via IM, have been incorporated, hence the strikthroughs.

The poem that is to be the opening for the Sahmain service on Sunday next )
dcseain: Cast shot of me playing my violin in role of minstrel in the Two Gentlemen of Verona (Default)
A city of marble.

Above is your theme: A city of marble. What i ask you to do with this theme is tell me your choice(s) of:
  • a tale about a city of marble.
  • your concepts of a city of marble.
  • what the phrase a city of marble makes you think and/or feel.
  • how a city of marble appears in your head, now that the concept is there.
  • who inhabits a city of marble? How are they? What do they do?
  • Anything else that pleases you on that theme/leitmotif.

You have your charge. Please to respond. Anonymous is ok, but i'd really like to know who sent what. Email me if you'd rather not have your ID known; i'll post your submission as a comment, unless you did so anonymously already. Only anonymous posts will be screened, so again, email if you want privacy.

I thank you each in advance. This is half of a theme that i've been working with for years, and finally feel ready to move on with. I have very specific concepts, and for that matter, a very specific city, in mind, but i want to see what the world at large has to say on the theme before i move forward more. A sequel to this post may be coming soon. Thank you.

/pòitrè/

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